The Right Angle (Blogging U.)

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As writers and bloggers we know how important a “hook” is. 

Our masterpieces can fall into the abyss without the right hook, the focus, to pull the reader in.  All effort and emotion output gone.  A small flaw destroying the beautiful whole.

What changes this? Practice, reading, dedication — to a point. However there are more tools, and the Blogging University offers one this month. A workshop-style course at the writer’s speed for bloggers/writers/anyone, really.

The first post discusses THE ANGLE — the precise way you choose to tell the story. What makes it attractive to readers inundated with a multitude of stories. THE ANGLE, maybe … 

In preparation, I slayed some inner demons — via a fiction piece rooted in a quasi-personal experience, as all tales are — and am offering a short part here. The angle is key, as is reader engagement.

Here it is, a humble offering from yours truly: 

REUNION

 “I watched the mother’s one-arm hug, the quickness of the gesture, and wondered at a love that floods the heart only to drain like water from a tub. How did it feel? Seeing her son after a thirty-year absence.

The airport noise — announcements, hurried steps — nothing fell into any kind of sequence. The sight of Gage laughing nervously as he asked about her luggage, the flight, anything but what mattered unfolded like a fuzzy movie scene. Nothing fit the order, rogue little pieces of the world gone astray. One modicum of certainty in this unreliable life should be a mother’s constant love and presence. Shouldn’t it?

We made our way past a group of Chinese tourists documenting the big arrival to Los Angeles International Airport. I glanced back searching for the mothers. A woman ruffled a teenager’s hair; another pointed to a sign laughing with a young man.  Same as my mother’s laughter when sharing new discoveries. She laughed with all her heart. With her eyes. Her entire being.

The air smelled of stale humanity, odors that broke from the regular smells of the world. We rushed toward the exit, no luggage to be collected, only the bag Gage carried for his new-found mother who led our single file line toward the exit as if all life form depended on abandoning the rendezvous place. Maybe the smell affected her too. The chaos this reunion seemed to create in our delicate souls. Run. Maybe the world will rearrange itself out there.” 

~~~ Thank you for reading. Tell me, if you will, about your writing angle. Or anything you’d like to share.

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Image courtesy: uphillwriting.org

 

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12 responses to “The Right Angle (Blogging U.)

  1. “Maybe the world will rearrange itself out there.” – a most excellent sentence.

    As for picking a writing angle, my current project is science fiction so I can take all sorts of liberty with just about everything– even the setting itself– to get at the story I want to tell. With all that freedom, I’m not always sure I get the angle right the first time. Do you ever go back and rethink your approach?

    • Thank you, Matt. Yes, I go back and rething it many times. I redo if necessary, sometimes I redo too much and kill the story, so have to be careful. I try to never rethink/redo unless I let the story sit for some time, so I can read it again with fresh eyes.

  2. Interesting beginning. Now I have questions as to where this is going. How did they get here?

    • Liz, that’s the goal. :) To revel nothing but give the reader enough so she’ll come along for the ride. I only have a general idea as to where this one is going since I haven’t finished it, but will try to post more at some point. Thank you so much for visiting and the comment.

  3. I want to know the rest of the story. Why a 30-year absence? Where has Mom been…or was it the son who left? Nice tease, Silvia. – Fawn

  4. Beautifully written as usual, Sylvia. And the tease is there – had me thinking perhaps this is an adopted young man meeting his birth mother for the first time. I’ve always wondered how I would feel if my son looked for and found his.
    Hooks for books! Great rhyme! I find mine in things I observe that could have a murderous twist. Last one was at a wedding…

  5. “Nothing fit the order, rogue little pieces of the world gone astray.”

    This sentence is exquisite in its breadth. It is perfect to describe the unease in this interaction between your characters, and at the same time, it describes what we all must be feeling about the current global disorder.

    I’m not sure I can pinpoint your angle, but this piece of writing – while creating a sense of discomfort – makes me want to follow them from the airport to see what happens next.

  6. Thanks for an informative post and thought-provoking story. Short, yet powerful. My favorite two sentences: One modicum of certainty in this unreliable life should be a mother’s constant love and presence. Shouldn’t it?

  7. Since I only write my personal essays, the angle depends on the point that I want to get across to my reader. My family was not a healthy family, so I have always volunteered with organizations that helped kids… even to this day. Family or life is important to me… so what is the issue that I want to present to my reader?

    I liked your thought-provoking comment. I wanted to know where your story was headed. Great job.

  8. Beautiful, Silvia. I also thought it might be a man meeting his birth mother. but you certainly grabbed my interest! Since I write for children, my angle has to be something that will relate to their world.

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